Alright, I got a BIG question here.
Because .. The length on this is very long.
Who is this for at this level of length?
This is a good question. I think I would currently say "anyone who cares to read it." Who are those people? I honestly don't know. The overall goals of the document are described on page 2 "Introduction" with some broader concerns under "Disclaimer, Limitations, and Future Directions" on page 3.
This is a "Fundamentals" thread, and I am going to answer any questions as briefly or thoroughly as I can.
Your question made me think about why I was struggling to answer it, and then I realized that sharing some of the writing process is relevant too.
It could certainly lose some words, maybe 25% depending on the section. I tend to think that one could delete most of the words and just look at the figures, too.
There were versions that were closer to ~50 pages, but as I wrote I increasingly realized that a document of that length (with figures) would lack sufficient context and linking ideas between figures and words to understand parts of the mechanics of form. Much of the early text was adapted directly from this forum. That editing process ended around midway through the project. And then I read the whole thing again and thought "You really have to make some leaps of cognition here to see how some of the ideas are connected."
From that point, the real "work" I did and why I consider myself a coauthor rather than primary author was that I identified additional ways to illustrate and link the concepts that were not obvious to me just from reading forum posts or watching videos without challenging myself to force it into a single narrative. Basically, any time I couldn't understand something myself, a new figure or new writing emerged after processing it for a while, and usually in many more ways than appear in the public document. These insights often came from looking at form critiques and how Sidewinder attacked them and trying to understand causes and effects in form.
I realized somewhere during writing it that I could do a decent job describing some processes one level
lower than the current level (e.g., physics and biomechanics of pressure readings, joint-to-joint interactions and how linear forces convert to rotational forces in biology, and so on). However, to do that for everything would probably require closer to 200+ tight pages, numerous direct academic citations, more words and equations, and years of additional learning well beyond my current academic depth (or energy/time). Problematically, I also think that is where many of the "meaty" real scientific questions exist that would take years of expert work to answer. I'd love to do it, but that's the kind of effort I put in at my full-time job, and it comes with a cost and significant additional training needs that I could never complete alone.
So at that point I targeted ~100 pages and decided to stop when it started to become hard to identify what to change without input.
It would take some time and care for me to figure out where to "carve it at the joints," and I'm a little too close to the writing and my own form work at this point.
Thus, I am very open to specific critiques while I get a little distance from it in the meantime. Feel free to mention here or PM.
Are we just trying to consolidate a bunch of information to consolidate, or are we trying to revise this to make a useable reading for anyone who's interested in a more academic reading of disc golf form? Because at the current writing and length of it as stands, were in scholarship paper academic length.
I read this a few times and after thinking about it, I would just say "yes," though it might depend on a reader's expectations for "useable" are. Can you say what you have in mind?
I am aware that there is also a distinction between true academic writing (which I would say I do in my day job, and that this is not) and academically informed writing tailored for broad or specific audiences. I think everyone could maybe take
something from it, but I do not think that this document will reach all audiences. I am not even sure there is an audience other than a handful of very specific types of people. Maybe that's ok. Maybe not. So I am open to thoughts there too.
Maybe written almost a bit to personal as well?
That could be true.
Since it started as a story I started to help
myself understand the backhand, it inevitably involved personal points and anecdotes and of course I know my own struggles the best. I also knew some of Sidewinder's due to so much time learning from him. If certain areas of the story suffer for that, they could be removed or become less identifying. I was mostly interested in whether they could support a point in the narrative wherever they appear in the text or figures, and it was usually easiest (if a bit lazy or selfish) to generate them when I had a direct experience of them.
It's really tough for me to read this style of writing personally. I am a special case though, so don't take that in a negative fashion, there are just certain ways people write longform that are waaaaay to wordy and I trigger and turn off.
That is ok. I critique academic writing and am critiqued for academic writing as part of my day job.
This document currently uses a tone that is somewhere between a casual and academic style, meandering between the two a bit here and there. I would not strictly call it "academic" myself because it is not yoked to numerous primary citations grounded in peer-reviewed research, which is part of what I found challenging and interesting in writing the first draft. I find Sidewinder's level of analysis interesting and somewhat unique within disc golf, so struggling to do some editorial work and add my own style of weaving the story together ended up being frankly kind of exhilarating to struggle through. It was in some ways the hardest writing I've ever attempted. It can improve.
As of this comment we're already on public release 1.0.2. after integrating some other sources of feedback. As I have time and receive feedback I expect it to continue to evolve over time. The 1.0.0. series also gave me the liberty to give myself up to 99 edits before I consider a version 2.